I just Wanna Be Average – Prewriting 2

Ryan DeLuca

Feb 26, 2019

ENG 123

Dr. Drown

I Just Wanna Be Average – Prewriting 2

Rose states that he “… defended himself against the lessons he couldn’t understand…” What I think he means is he defended himself against the lessons that he thought weren’t useful to him, to prove this my point Rose say’s “All the hours in class tend to blend into one long, vague stretch of time.” This is something I can relate to, when I am in class and I don’t see any significant value in what is being taught I doze off and start thinking about other things, and sometimes words that the teacher says control what I think about, for example, if I am dozing off and the teacher mentions the word “fixing” my mind would travel to what I have to fix on my truck or ATV. More than I would like to admit I have to pull myself back into concentration. What Rose couldn’t understand was the real-world applications for what the teacher was teaching, I know because I’ve been there I have a hard time learning something if I can’t see a real-world application that will benefit me. For example, I don’t think I will ever need to know that the mitochondria is the powerhouse of the cell when I am trading on the New York stock exchange or what alcohol does to a water flees heart rate that stuff will be useless to me and Rose was thinking the same thing when learning about breaking up sentences and adverbs. I am not sure what was strange about the people around him, could have been they all weren’t dreamers like him and he might have thought it was strange that everyone was hypnotized by the school curriculum

I just Wanna Be Average – Prewriting 1

Ryan DeLuca

Feb 24th, 2019

ENG 123

Dr. Drown

I Just Wanna Be Average – Prewriting 1

The kind of child hood Rose had seems to be the kind of child hood any kid would have if their parents were scrambling for money. His child hood family contains his mother and father and a few people who live in the same house as him, he has a close relationship with his father. He frequently talks about how him and his father go to a restaurant named Freddie’s to get something to eat before going to a bowling ally to play games while his father has a few drinks at the bar. He also mentions how he tried to cheer his father up when he was sick, “I began devising child’s ways to make him better. We had a box of rolled cotton in the bathroom, and I would go in and peel off a long strip and tape it around my jaw. Then I’d rummage through the closet, find a sweater of my father’s put one of his hats—and sneak around to the back door.” He tried his best to cheer his father up when he wasn’t feeling well by doing what children do best, dressing up in a costume and sneaking around. Some dangers he would occasionally encounter include criminals running from the police and throwing contraband on his lawn, “ One night I watched as a guy sprinted from Walt’s to toss something on out lawn. The police were right behind, and a cop tackled him, smashing his face into the side walk.” Another danger Rose encounter was, a man named Carman, he lived directly south of Rose house next to a barber, Carmon sounds like a crazy man, “Carman was a short, quiet Italian who, rumor had it, had committed his first wife to the crazy house to get her money. In the afternoons, Carman could be found in the lot behind his shop playing solitary catch, flinging a tennis ball high in to the air and running under it. One day police arrested Carman on charges of child molestation.” The area Rose lived in, he could have easily been put into the obituary or put on national television for selling drugs, but none of that happened, he stayed away from most of the dangers.

Rose neighborhood compared to Coates they sound very similar, they both have a crazy neighborhood shop owner, they both have groups of “bad boys” also called gangs who roam the streets causing trouble. Rose and Coates experienced the same dangers they both could have easily been abducted and they both could have easily been shot or become a drug dealer. But, that didn’t happen to them they stayed safe they took school seriously, but they also had to take the street seriously both simultaneously, taking school seriously might have been the best thing they did to pull them selves away from the dangers of the streets and neighborhood school kept them safe and allowed them to chart a new path to greatness.

Towards the end of page 18 on I Just Wanna Be Average, Rose wrote “I developed a picture of human existence that rendered it short and brutish or sad and aimless or long and quiet with rewards like afternoon naps, the evening news paper, walks around the block, occasional letters from children in other states.” This look on life would seem to be the case for many American kids who live in tough neighborhoods they seems to think there is no way out of this life they live, thinking that way would bring someone down and transform them into another statistic. Thinking “… it all sounded like a grorious fairy tail…” would cause someone to not take the way out seriously. When I say the way out I am talking about school, school is the way out for most of these kids that live in the tough neighborhoods academics would allow them to go to college get a degree and make a positive name for them-selves, sadly some kids don’t see academics as the way out and those are the ones that will live their whole life in

Between the World and Me – Prewriting 3

Ryan DeLuca

Feb 21st, 2019

ENG 123

Dr. Drown

Between the World and Me – Prewriting 3

Coates talked about how his school went on about teaching black history month. He doesn’t seem pleased with what they are showing him and his classmates about how black were mistreated. Coates gives this elaboration about what he feels about the black history month, he says his teachers “…urged us toward the example of freedom marches, freedom riders, and freedom summers, and it seemed the month could not pass without a series of films dedicated to glories of being beaten on camera.” Cotes is displeased by the way the fight for freedom is portrayed in these films he almost feels like they are glorifying the harsh beating black received during this time. Coates also talks about how the black people act in the films he says, “The black people in these films seemed to love the worst things in life—love the dogs that rent their children apart, the tear gas that clawed at their lungs, the fire hoses that tore on their clothes and tumbled them into the streets.” The way Coates says this it almost feels like he doesn’t believe what the films are showing them, I think he feels the people in the films aren’t relaying the story accurately.

 

Between the World and Me – Prewriting 2

Ryan DeLuca

Feb 19, 2019

ENG 123

Dr. Drown

Between the World and Me – Prewriting Two

The fear that Coates was exposed to while he was growing up a small boy was to prevent his from following a path of drugs and violence. His parents were afraid he would be kidnapped and killed if he was to leave the site of his parents so his parents disciplined him so he wouldn’t run off “I slipped from their gaze and found a playground. Your grandparents spent anxious minutes looking for me. When they found me, Dad did what every parent I knew would have done – he reached for his belt. I remember watching him in a kind of daze, awed at the distance between punishment and offense.” ( pp. 16)The beatings he got as a child were meant to teach him not to run off, they weren’t meant to protect Coates, they were meant to keep him going in a straight line his father said, “Either I can beat him, or the police.” (pp, 16) This leads us to believe that back in Coats youth America was still transitioning from heavy segregation and suppuration, Coates father may have been mistaking beating Coates into a great man and teaching Coates to be a great man with words of wisdom. I can see Coates father’s logic behind his physical lessons though, Coates father was thinking if I show him the beginning of the physical pain that will be caused if he is a bad boy he won’t want to be a bad boy. In some households, this has been seen to drive the children away from their families and out of the house, but it seemed to work for Coates.

The experiences Coates son might experience in a neighborhood now may be very similar to what might have happened back when Coates was a young fellow growing up. You may not find some of the gangs and territories today, obviously, they still exist but in smaller numbers, they aren’t nearly as big as they might have been back then. Today Coates son will experience “… what it means to grow up with a black president, social networks, omnipresent media, and black woman everywhere in their natural hair.” Back when Coates was growing up no one had social media, no one would have even considered electing a black president and black woman wouldn’t have wanted to be seen within their natural hair.

Between the World and Me – Pre-writing 1

Ryan DeLuca

Feb 18th, 2019

ENG 123

Dr. Drown

Between the world and me Pre-writing

In class we talked about what Coates statement meant, “But race is the child of racism, not the father.” The but in the sentence refers to a sentence in the paragraph above “In this way, racism is rendered as the innocent daughter of Mother Nature…” How these two sentences are related is as follows, the first sentence gives us the idea that Racism came before race and the daughter of mother nature is Racism. With is idea I believe he is sort of contradicting his self by saying, Racism came before race. It sounds backwards and doesn’t make sense.

Coates portrays the American dream as wanting to be white and wanting to raise their kids to be white and believing they are white, he says as he walks down the street he feels sad for the people “Families, beliving themselves white, were out on the streets. Infants, raised to be white, were bundled in strollers. And I was sad for those people, much as I was sad for the host and sad for all the people out there watching and reveling in a specious hope.” What Coates means by this is people in the black community are raising their kids to act white and are acting like they are white to fit into their communities. Something else Coates says about the American dream is what he thinks the American dream is, “It is perfect houses with nice lawns. It is Memorial Day cookouts, block associations, and driveways. The dream is treehouses and cub Scouts. The dream smells like peppermint but tastes like strawberry shortcake.” Coates believes the American dream to be, living in a close community where everyone likes each other, and where everyone has everything nice, a nice house, a nice lawn, nice neighbors, and perfect family.

Eagle cam

Eagle Cam Observations

Start 7:40 pm

  • Looks like the mother eagle is sleeping
  • It looks like there might be an eggshell in the left side of the nest
  • There is only one eagle in the nest at the moment
  • Jann Pittman from the live chat has a short fuse
  • 7:51, a big gust of wind
  • Garry from live chat said goodnight
  • Eagle picked her head up and shook it and looked around
  • Eagle readjusted sleeping position

End 7:55 pm

Integrating my ideas with others

Ryan DeLuca

Feb 14, 2019

ENG 123

Dr. Drown

Integrating my ideas with others

Reflection is very important when it comes to seeing if you’ve learned something. If you don’t look back at the lessons you’ve had how do you know that you have learned anything? When I write a paper, I do my best to bring other people’s ideas into my papers to either counter what I am saying or prove the point I am trying to make. Here is an example from the most recent paper I wrote for class,

“When someone covers their true self, the reason fluctuates with certain circumstances. Particularly, one form of covering is about hiding a minor part of your personality, which is less impactful than the second form, which involves hiding a part of your identity. An example of the first form is a job interview when you might feel the need to tone down your use of expletives. Essentially this is an example of adapting to the circumstance, hiding a part of your personality. An example of the second form of covering might happen to someone who is gay or lesbian who lives in a very religious society or community where everyone stigmatizes same-sex intimacy. To avoid being ousted, or in an extreme case beaten you would want to or need to “Cover” the idea that you have a liking toward someone of the same sex. Yoshino uses a famous example of real-world covering to emphasize that people in the spotlight cover too because they as well were afraid of the backlash it might have caused, “Long after they came out as Lesbians, Rosie O’ Donnell and Mary Cheney still covered, keeping their same-sex partners out of the public eye.” Even though Rosie O’ Donnell and Mary Cheney came out as Lesbians they still covered the fact that they had same-sex lovers simply because it was outside of what was the societal norm.

This is a great example of integrating my ideas with others, my examples are two opposites but have a common attribute they are covering for a reason, one person is hiding a part of their personality in order to get a job and the other person is hiding a part of their personal identity in order to fit in with normal society. The examples I brought in are examples that Yoshino uses in his article, he talked about Rosie O’ Donnell and Mary Cheney and how they hid that they were lesbians for years but eventually came out but also hid that they had same-sex partners for even longer because they feared the possibility of hate or even losing their careers.

Another example of Integrating my ideas with others would be in the first paper that was assigned, this one is about the “Toast story” a woman who made a name for herself and pushed past her disability to become a successful businesswoman.

“Once she finished college she had enough of being left in the dark by her small group of friends and getting kicked out by her landlords, so she started making a network of people she could become acquainted with, once she moved to China beach California and worked at a coffee shop for a little bit before starting her network. She thought if she had a big group of friends she wouldn’t be alone if a few of her friends left her. She got the idea of opening her own coffee shop from her boss and an old man who sunbathed in the same spot on China beach every day, she had made a friendship with this old man. After she finished working for the coffee shop she started making her presence known by just walking up to people and saying hi and introducing herself, she would eventually gather enough people she could count on and would borrow money to buy what used to be a former dog groomer to turn into her coffee shop. “She called the shop Trouble, in honor of all the people who helped her when she was in trouble.” Her shop became her identity in this small area of China beach California, and it was for a good reason she made this shop her identity, she stuck to the same schedule because she wanted people in her area to be able to recognize her and help her if she was having one of her episodes. People would recognize her as the owner of Trouble coffee and coconut club.”

This is more an example of me bringing in examples from the text to better explain the reason why this woman named her coffee shop “Trouble” and why she started a coffee shop in the first place. This example isn’t as fine-tuned as the first but it was my best effort, a trial and error situation. When I was looking to better integrate my ideas with other I took into consideration what I did wrong with the first essay about the “Toast Story” and what I could improve in when integrating my ideas with other. It was easier integrating my ideas with others in the second essay with Yoshino, I feel like there was more to talk about in the “Covering” topic.

Reading -Reflection

Ryan DeLuca

Feb 11, 2019

Eng 123

Dr. Drown

 

When I am reading an essay that was assigned to read I read it once without out doing anything to it and then I re-read the entire piece with my highlighter and pen. What I do with the highlighter is I highlight important segments in the paragraph that may have some significance to them and then with the pen I write why I highlighted that specific segment in the paper. Sometimes I re-read my highlighting to see if it was actually important and I underline with my pen if I over highlighted a certain part of the paragraph. I find this way effective because I find concepts that I may have missed the first time I read it. Reading this way also helps me figure out what is important and what isn’t important, sometimes if I try and read and do the highlighting without reading it first I highlight some stuff that might not have been as important as something else a little further down on the page. It keeps me from over highlighting. When it comes to integrating my ideas with others I think I do that fairly well, I believe I incorporate quotations from the readings that are relevant to the point I am trying to get across. The amount of annotating I do I don’t think is enough because I have a hard time finding a concept that I may have highlighted but because I didn’t write next to it I have trouble trying to go back and find it.

My informal writing is usually a good length, I don’t like them to be too long because If I was reading it I wouldn’t want the paper to be very long, I try my best to get my point across without the paper being too long. My depth usually depends on the subject, if I am trying to write about identity and the consequences I will go very in-depth, But If I am writing about a circumstances where someone might want to cover their identity I don’t have to go really in depth with that, I can just give a topic sentence and example on the significance, then tell why and be done with it. When I am writing try and make everything in the paper useful to read I don’t like to include anything that doesn’t go along with the whole topic of the paper.